What was the point of this animation? I don't see a clear message behind this animation. I'm certainly agreeing with Xorias here. Words cannot describe what I want to say right now.
Suggestion: add either a pause or stop button.
Hey I've got a suggestion for you to Zap!
YOU ADD EITHER A PAUSE OR STOP BUTTON.
Your description is a load of poop. There is nothing about a "touching story" or anything about black children not being on a dance team due to racial intolerance or whatever you put. It's just the same music looped over and over, with a guy getting jiggy with the air. Try not to lie on your next submission.
I'LL WRITE WHAT I WANT TO WRITE GOD DAMNIT, DON'T TRY AND MINIMIZE MY RIGHTS!! WHO DO YOU THINK YOU ARE?!?!
A Good Idea...
Hmm, well, might I suggest improving the collision detection a bit? It seems as though you can only "die" when hit in the center.
Other than that piece of advice, the game was...enough to distract me from other things. There really isn't a point, and with no sound effects or music, it was a lonely game, if that makes sense.
All in all, the idea was good, but it needs to be polished more.
I'm quite ambiguous about the whole piece. Some parts were a little gravelly for my liking, and the volume levels were all over the place. Then again, other parts were pretty good, which more or less evened out the whole piece.
My advice to you is instead of making the sections fade into one another, take them out at flesh them out into standalone pieces, that way, instead of waiting for quite some time to get to a part that they like, they can just listen to a single in that form.
Also, no voices. In a piece like this, the voices felt quite out of place and unnecessary. With so much stuff going on, you really can't afford to screw up, at least too much.
I also noticed some repeated rhythems in the song. No. Just no.
And it's also a tad on the long side. Again, with the separate sections, you're just better off making a bunch of high quality, superb pieces than making just one really long, average one with all of the rhythems that sound cool.
Dude clam down i wasn't aiming for it to be the best on NG
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